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Cross Effects 1.0 Archive / Re: Cross Effects - Sign Up, Discussion Page
« on: February 23, 2014, 01:04:54 AM »
It's cool, YOLF. The drill wasn't actually that tough. It was more of a flashy thing to bring out your A-Game. Water in the MGQ universe is all about serenity and flow. Direct attacks like that aren't really it's forte. Where it shines is in finding weak points, redirecting attacks rather than outright blocking them, and in general being a 'soft' weapon that can't be easily opposed by sheer force.

Anyway, expect my post in a few.

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Cross Effects 1.0 Archive / Re: Cross Effects - Sign Up, Discussion Page
« on: February 22, 2014, 09:17:59 PM »
She has an icy personality, but he's no stranger to cold shoulders!

The new hit romantic comedy, coming to theatres and forums near you!

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Cross Effects 1.0 Archive / Re: Cross Effects- The RP
« on: February 22, 2014, 08:47:02 PM »
"Rate you?" Undine descended from her perch, hovering over what remained of the worgen. She looked at it without any interest. "Well, you're skilled, that much is certain. However, to do something like gauge your power, a more... hands on experience is needed."

With a crack, the shell of ice that the spirit had donned fell apart, revealing her in her true watery form underneath. She glanced at Bonesington.

"A friendly display of prowess," she suggested. "I've been dying to see how powerful I am in this world, and this is the perfect opportunity. Perhaps that flaming simpleton is rubbing off on me, but after a show like that I feel compelled to answer with something of my own!"

The moisture in the air thickened abruptly. Flakes of ice shook, clumping and melting together to form a haze that floated around Undine, coalescing into a twisting double helix that revolved around her body, picking up speed with every passing second. Her serene smile widened into a grin.

"Though I am one of the four elemental spirits of this world, I too am a monster," Undine continued. "In the past, before age taught me wisdom, I would slay and consume countless so called 'Heroes' who dared to challenge me for power. Much like you, I suspect. Now I teach each successive Monster Lord how to use water, granting my powers only to those who earn it."

The spinning helix coalesced into a drill-like construct, pointed straight at Bonesington. Undine didn't lift a finger to move it. Water simply obeyed her as if it was part of her body.

"Erect your barrier," she said. "I'll see how powerful it is."

"Aqua Drill!"

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Cross Effects 1.0 Archive / Re: Cross Effects - Sign Up, Discussion Page
« on: February 22, 2014, 09:33:16 AM »
Not so much a trap as it is him plodding along and waiting for someone to try and kill him. Of course he'll always have a few small tricks up his sleeves, but it's not like he specially prepared for this exact situation. He's expecting Gabriel to do something; he just doesn't know what.

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Cross Effects 1.0 Archive / Re: Cross Effects - Sign Up, Discussion Page
« on: February 22, 2014, 07:38:48 AM »
Elf, when you 'port to the construct thingy, it'll be waiting on a rather large roof a block or two from the action. It's not really fast enough to get away, and the guy never really expected to be allowed to 'leave' unmolested.

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Cross Effects 1.0 Archive / Re: Cross Effects- The RP
« on: February 20, 2014, 10:11:54 PM »
"Interesting," as the temperature in the church dropped several degrees, a curious formation of ice made itself known, twisting and forming in the air until it was a rather jagged caricature that only barely resembled a woman. "You are a skilled sorcer, Mr. Bonesington," Undine said. "That ice magic approaches that of the Monster Lord herself."

The ice making up Undine's body broke and froze again as she perched on top of a rather abused angel statue, watching the situation with interest. "Should I presume that monster is from your world? Most of ours are at least able to speak."

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Cross Effects 1.0 Archive / Re: Cross Effects - Sign Up, Discussion Page
« on: February 20, 2014, 06:37:15 AM »
Hey YOLF, would Bonesington mind some non-bloodthirsty company? He seems rather alone in that church, though I'll admit that's mostly my fault in the first place.

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Cross Effects 1.0 Archive / Re: Cross Effects - Sign Up, Discussion Page
« on: February 20, 2014, 04:49:49 AM »
Eh, it was more like two dozen or so, but they were pretty spread out.

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Cross Effects 1.0 Archive / Re: Cross Effects - Sign Up, Discussion Page
« on: February 20, 2014, 02:49:38 AM »
Gotta admit, that was a pretty ballsy move. Blowing up a whole castle to get rid of a few low level familiars is definitely something I'd see Alter doing, though.

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Cross Effects 1.0 Archive / Re: Cross Effects - Sign Up, Discussion Page
« on: February 19, 2014, 03:16:50 PM »
Hey B, is Construct Dude on the rooftop of the compound or one of the nearby buildings?

One of the nearby buildings. He's too wary to approach the compound itself.

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Cross Effects 1.0 Archive / Re: Cross Effects- The RP
« on: February 19, 2014, 02:23:23 AM »
"Would you like to come with me?"

His skin was glowing, the girl idly mused as she listened to his melodious words. It reminded her of a book she'd read in her childhood. But she'd hated the idea and called it stupid, yet now, in this very moment, Gabriel pulled it off so perfectly that shouldn't muster a single complaint.

...a childhood? Ah, yes. She'd been someone, once.

It was only when her hand was halfway to the pretty man's that she jerked to a halt, her face locked in a frown as contradictory orders began to assault her mind. He'd asked her to go with him, but a part of her said no to the idea, most vehemently. The voice in the back of her head was growing louder, sneering at her weakness and ordering her to back away immediately.

"I... he wouldn't like that," she said weakly, looking Gabriel in the eyes. "But I think I would."

With that, her brain had enough of the nonsense, and she collapsed, falling limply to the ground like a puppet with its strings cut. However, just before her body shut down completely, her right hand twisted, throwing the phone it held backwards until it came to a stop next to a mass of metallic junk that didn't look like it belonged on a roof.

Wires extended from the pile, stabbing into the battered phone and reeling it into the heart of the ramshackle construction. With the rattle of a blown out speaker, a man's voice emerged from within. "I'll take that message to heart, stranger, and ask you to deliver one in return. Tell the Law Unto Herself that she can expect more of these visits. I doubt these constructs will trouble the inhabitants of this compound greatly, but enough water can wear away even the strongest stone. If she wants them to stop, there's another disposable phone in that undead's pocket. A talk might help, if it's her." A mass of wires twisted together to point a misshapen finger at the prone vampire.

With creaks and groans, the metal unfolded, rising as tall as a man and stopping its growth at a height of seven feet. A pair of cracked sunglasses lay perched on the thing's misshapen head, with a faded yellow traffic cone serving as the star to the tree. The thing had no rhyme or reason to it. It couldn't be called a robot, since many of its components floated inches away from each other with no visible connection, yet it walked and stood and talked, albeit irregularly. It stared down the shining man before it, judging him.

"I already have what I came here for," the speaker crowed triumphantly. "Since I'm feeling merciful, I'll let you keep that broken toy. I have many more. She won't be of any use, though, so I suggest getting rid of her quickly."

With that, the walking scrap heap turned away and, with an awkward punch that nonetheless moved smoother than it had any right to, sent the rooftop door flying down the stairwell. The mass ducked under and placed a hand on the frame, turning its 'head' back to Gabriel at the last second.

"Oh, yes," the speaker added. "Are you going to try and stop me from leaving? I wouldn't suggest it, but if you can, you'd likely stop the attacks completely before they can even begin."

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Fanfiction / Re: the OC corner
« on: February 16, 2014, 08:13:53 PM »
Thanks for spitting on me Bloble, that's awesome

I'll take it back if you can give me evidence of a single person other than yourself liking Satoshi. You've written decent characters. He isn't one of them.

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Fanfiction / Re: the OC corner
« on: February 16, 2014, 06:13:37 AM »
Overpowered is almost never good, bro. Ever. Overpowered canon characters are almost always universally hated (except Gil, but whatevs) and overpowered OCs are guaranteed to be hated. I say this with a hundred percent certainty. Look from an outside perspective here. No matter how much you justify it or how much shit you put your character through, no one will like him once he gets that strong. 'Slightly weaker than Gil' is still much too powerful for pretty much everyone. Personally, I'd be wary if you made your guy more powerful than Saber or Lancer. But if that's your intention, fine.

If you're looking for a beta reader or more responses to your idea, I suggest going to Beast's Lair. They've got the best Type-Moon authors and fanboys, so they'll be able to provide better feedback than I ever could, though it'll probably be a lot more insulting as well.

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Fanfiction / Re: the OC corner
« on: February 16, 2014, 05:33:08 AM »
Okay, I'll take the chance and assume you're serious about this and not one of CV's lame attempts at trolling. I have three pieces of advice for you.

1. Make your guy weaker, or at least make his final iteration weaker. This isn't something that's negotiable. The hard and fast rule is that Gilgamesh is the strongest Heroic Spirit. It's a rule for a reason. The fucker is OP on purpose and anyone capable of going toe to toe with serious Gil without pulling out an affinity advantage or the power of love (the explicit, author stated reason Saber beat him in Fate) is too strong to be a good character, no matter how many thousands of words you spend justifying said power. You can still have a good story and awesome fights with a relatively weak protagonist, and in fact, they'll be better for it (Shirou and Shiki spend Tsukihime and FSN barely managing to survive and hitting way above their level). Just look at lantz. He thinks his guy Satoshi is the best thing ever, but every single person other than lantz hates Satoshi's guts, and for good reason. Your character is even worse than that, somehow.

2. Read Sleeping With the Girls. It's a similar story to yours about an ordinary self insert thrown into a bunch of anime universes and forced to survive, and it's probably the best such story on the internet. If you're going to follow anyone's example, follow this story's.

3. Get a beta reader. Preferably not someone like Mike who only cares that his favourite character is treated nicely.

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Fanfiction / Re: the OC corner
« on: February 16, 2014, 01:16:37 AM »
Bro your self insert could out fight Satoshi, and that story idea is worse than Naruto. In short, it's Ecstasy Darks levels of bad.

0/10


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