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« Reply #165 on: July 23, 2013, 05:42:49 AM »
LOL. XD Hopefully any new charas that come in at this point won't join the current huge mess that's going on in the City's center. ^_^"

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« Reply #166 on: July 23, 2013, 05:46:20 AM »
Forest is very much getting "too old for this shit".

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« Reply #167 on: July 23, 2013, 06:59:47 AM »
Holy shit this is almost worse than the 5th Grail War. Rider's luck really SUCKS

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« Reply #168 on: July 23, 2013, 07:42:41 AM »
LOL. XD Hopefully any new charas that come in at this point won't join the current huge mess that's going on in the City's center. ^_^"

Anymore will seriously break things. Observation, sure. If they participate...the city may get flattened, and most characters will probably die...
Like Lantz did, assuming he doesn't jump in...

Then again, with Lancer and Archer incoming, the city probably will get flattened...

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« Reply #169 on: July 23, 2013, 11:14:16 AM »
Yeah, hopefully activity starts to spread out more. ^_^" Rin dropping in on Archer and Lancer might slow things down a bit at least on that front.

That was one text wall of death I posted though. O_O Should I split it into two posts? Also, any feedback on that monster is appreciated. ^_^"

EDIT: I also just realized that I may need to take part of Daiki's most recent post into consideration as well, and edit my post accordingly though it might still work as is. Any feedback on this is appreciated as well. :) ...This is also why I need to sleep before I do this stuff.
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« Reply #170 on: July 23, 2013, 02:13:20 PM »
Yeah, Rider seems to be getting Hakuno's luck now. ^_^" ...speaking of which, lol, Archer's gonna have his hands full trying to keep Rider from hitting on her once things quiet down it seems. :3

Lol, yeah....

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Since you asked me for feedback elsewhere, Cherry, btw, you did just fine. :D Only thing I saw that needs correcting is Hakuno's shield dropping, since she's still struggling with it but it hasn't quite dropped yet, but it's not a biggie since it's a logical conclusion to make, and I was kinda ambiguous about it as well.

Ah, OK. I'll have to fix that then.

Also, OPOI, is Shirou actually doing the full UBW chant there? And, if not, would Rider be able to tell that he's not?

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« Reply #171 on: July 23, 2013, 03:20:13 PM »
Ugh... I finally finished the post I was going to have done yesterday!!

Sorry about that, guys.

By the way, guys, the Enforcers idea that I added was my idea for a police group. Hope that it wasn't presumptuous of me.
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« Reply #172 on: July 24, 2013, 02:14:50 AM »
It'll work, methinks.

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« Reply #173 on: July 24, 2013, 02:52:48 AM »
Yeah, Rider seems to be getting Hakuno's luck now. ^_^" ...speaking of which, lol, Archer's gonna have his hands full trying to keep Rider from hitting on her once things quiet down it seems. :3

Lol, yeah....

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Since you asked me for feedback elsewhere, Cherry, btw, you did just fine. :D Only thing I saw that needs correcting is Hakuno's shield dropping, since she's still struggling with it but it hasn't quite dropped yet, but it's not a biggie since it's a logical conclusion to make, and I was kinda ambiguous about it as well.

Ah, OK. I'll have to fix that then.

Also, OPOI, is Shirou actually doing the full UBW chant there? And, if not, would Rider be able to tell that he's not?

It depends on what happens. If intimidation works, then Just the first line is sufficient. If I'm forced to actually deploy UBW, the chant will be different, but I'm not quite sure how...

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« Reply #174 on: July 24, 2013, 02:56:36 AM »
Thanks, Elf, I was getting curious.

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« Reply #175 on: July 24, 2013, 03:20:57 AM »
It depends on what happens. If intimidation works, then Just the first line is sufficient. If I'm forced to actually deploy UBW, the chant will be different, but I'm not quite sure how...

Well, I was just asking to see if Rider would point it out or not. But, then, I noticed that Hakuno has already, so....

Unfortunately, I don't think I'm going to be able to post tonight. I'll try to get something done earlyish tomorrow, though.
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« Reply #176 on: July 24, 2013, 04:22:25 AM »
Just do your best when you can~

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Re: Cross Effects - Sign Up, Discussion Page
« Reply #177 on: July 24, 2013, 05:23:28 AM »
By the way, if anyone could please comment on the fight scene I wrote, I'd appreciate it greatly.

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« Reply #178 on: July 24, 2013, 01:32:53 PM »
By the way, if anyone could please comment on the fight scene I wrote, I'd appreciate it greatly.

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Right, sorry, too busy thinking up scenarios to deal with clusterfuck. Not getting anything

ANYWAY:
Fight (warning, I will be really harsh, sorry about that. I can tell you're trying hard, so keep at it!!):

Bit short, especially since you're fighting an NPC, and as such, can actually dictate what both characters can do. The rest of us are currently constrained by what our opponent will do, so we have to keep our sequence short to let our opponents react; you have no such limitation.

Power level: Not quite sure why random NPC no. 1 is capable of pretty much beating Sephiroth into the ground. Even if he resembles Zack Fair (and remember Zack and Cloud got curbstomped for the most part by Sephiroth as well...)
Not to mention (Quoted from yourself)
Strength: A
Agility: A
Speed: A++
Swordsmanship A+

In other words, stronger, faster, more agile, than Berserker, and pretty much most Servants...
Result: Sephiroth should have wiped the floor with Gatou Nouji (I know you were probably going for said mook to be a boss character, but Worf Effect was a little heavy here), and he most certainly should not have been hit three times, and nearly drop Masamune from the sword impacts. You tried justifying it, but I was under the impression Sephiroth is beyond true weapon masters...

I know you were going for drama, but the nature of your chosen character makes it somewhat unbelievable for a named mook to beat him into the ground...

Actual fight: simple. Too simple. Far too simple. Unbelievably far too simple. It consisted of Gatou hitting Sephiroth, Sephiroth randomly feeling the Worf, Sephiroth swinging in his general direction, Gatou hitting Sephiroth, more Worf, Gatou missing, then Sephiroth setting him on fire. Game over.

Vary up Sephiroth's attacks. Just saying "Sephiroth swung his sword in his opponent's general direction," is...{DATA REDACTED} Seriously, spice it up, maybe: "Suddenly Sephiroth pushed off the ground with tremendous force, his coat fluttering as he powered his way through the air. His nodachi, gleaming brightly under the rays of the nearby light, speared swiftly towards his desired target, but only hit air as Gatou altered his course with inhuman speed, the thin blade missing him by milimetres." Every little detail counts.

Basically I was saying the whole time: WHERE BE THE TACTICS? DESCRIPTION? ACTUAL SWORD TECHNIQUES? THE TRADE MARK SEPHIROTH SMIRK AND TAUNTING? INTERNAL DIALOGUE?

Oh and the potion. 11th hour superpower was kinda pushing it this time.

My advice: elaborate on the fight. Actually add a fight, not curb-stomping on one side then sudden curbstomping on the other because of a potion.
Changing the power levels at this point would probably break your post, but take the levels into account next time.
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« Reply #179 on: July 24, 2013, 03:22:07 PM »
There, the twins enter the fray.

^You're a bit quick to jump to conclusion. The guy could be pretty powerful and not a simple mob. He even had a name.
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