Whoo boy so much for me to pick apart piece by piece here... where should I start... I guess with the fact that if your two chapter fanfiction requires a primer, something has gone seriously wrong. Continuing on.
Firstly, I perceive the nasuverse as no different than a comic book, unlike the routes which adhere to the style of the novels this story is treated like a comic book. (Break for a bunch of stuff I can't be fucked at 1 AM to cover with a blanket quote response but mainly this bit is what's pissing me off)
And especially in the case of FSN the main hero follows the western idea of super heroism (we debated the subject back on the proboards) so styling the story like a comic book fits.
And this is your first mistake, and probably the underpinning of why I find most of your work rather irritating to read. You've entirely misinterpreted Shirou's character - he doesn't follow the idea of a Western Hero, you realize. I could link a bunch of stuff Arashi and others debated on the subject, but once more it is 1 AM but I can basically sum this up like this - Shirou doesn't follow the Western Idea of heroism because Nasu really doesn't apply this either. Shirou is a hero far more in the Kamen Rider style than he is in the Superman style, and this is shown.
For that matter you're generalizing far far far more than should be done with comic books. When you're saying that you're going with a very very small subset of comics that the Nasuverse pretty much avoids - superhero comics. In my opinion the Nasuverse is far more in the style of Sandman, or One Hundred Bullets than any Marvel, DC, or Image caped crusader style property. This is a glaring error in your logic that bleeds into your writing with the nasuverse. Styling the Nasuverse after cape comics is missing the damn point of it and the flavor Nasu intended to impart from it.
Read 100 Bullets. Far closer to Nasu than any cape comic I could think of.
On to the second matter. Spoilers, I hate them, I do not see the point in giving them out, the point of a story is to read it. As such, should I tell you it's a spoiler then leave it at that and wait for the answer.
Fair enough, but honestly this is just going to tick most people the fuck off.
Thirdly, insults and disrespectful behavior are not something I will put up with, if you call names, rage post or use the term Mary sue in here your questions will no longer be accepted or answered. This may seems harsh but frankly we are all mature people and as such should be able to discuss things properly.
I wish to state that nearly every time we do become civil you tend to act childish and delete/have someone lock the thread serious criticism is leveled in. I don't understand how you expect to improve as a writer with that sort of attitude. Don't like don't read will murder your improvement chances. Critics aren't evil, just people who dislike a piece of work and say why. They are necessary in any society to inform the consumer of a bad product.
Fourth, the point of fan fiction is fun. If you are just here to nit pick, bitch or criticize then I suggest you go elsewhere.
Once again, discarding criticism just because you dislike it. Nitpicks are important because they can reveal deeper flaws within a work. Enough nits becomes a gaping plot hole.
Fifth, the story is one containing time travel, Multi-dimensional travel and yes a trip to the root. If you can't stand alternate history, time paradoxes or interpretation then get out of dodge now.
I have to say this depends on how you interpret paradox compared to how it should work, and if how you do so doesn't work (See thirdfang's fucking indestructible swords bullshit) then expect to be criticized for it. Warning you right off the bat. This is an aspect that people will show no mercy on when you don't understand how alternate realities would actually work. Spoiler, you seem to not grasp this.
Skipping six because I don't give a fuck, I got through the Illiad.
Seventh, the meaning of my works at large is hope and triumph despite the odds. I enjoy stories where despite the odds the good guys can succeed, where the reader can cheer because the tension means something more than "oh god Kohaku doesn't remember her own name" or such that makes the reader feel like shit. Positivity, in a word, is my theme for this story. Don't like it don't read.
The bittersweet ending is my preferred, because sometimes the heroes can't win, they can only break even. That makes what's gained seem all the sweeter. Your mileage may vary on this one.
Eighth, I am aware of the inconsistencies in canon, some are age, others are intentionally part of the plot. In either case they make the story hit the mark of silver age sensibilities better so I won't be changing the story as I post it. I accepted a lot of feedback and did plenty of research (a year and a half time wise) after playing the games. The story is what it is, if you don't like it, well, sorry but I'm not changing it.
...OK. You are basing your stories direction and style off of the SILVER AGE OF COMICS!?!?!?!?!? I... look, this is unbelievably stupid, considering the Silver Age compared to the Nasuverse tone and content wise. Also, your year of research doesn't matter when you violate all the setting rules, just saying. Refusing to change the story is the sign of a bad author.
Skipping Ninth because I don't give a fuck and when your 'noncanon' material is larger than your canon material it calls into serious question which is the actual canon material.
Tenth, their are references everywhere in my work, if you don't like that then too bad, bad puns, naming conventions and titles are full of that stuff.
Considering that I've seen your past tries at this please stop. If you can't be clever about it then don't do it, and all signs indicate you are not clever about it.
Read some Dresden Files on how to actually reference things like pop culture and do a decent spin with it.
As for the rest I'm too tired to cover that shit at the moment but seriously expecting to have like 10 threads about your shit and being taken seriously is not goin gto happen, if anything it pisses people off more because all the information is not in one place.
I'm also going to be linking the Q&A thread (
http://darksidemoon.net/SMF_forum/index.php/topic,204.0.html) you had locked because future readers do deserve to know what's in there and so you can't silence any dissenting voice like you have attempted to in the past. Call this an insult if you like, but previous behavior by yourself indicates that you'll attempt to delete threads you've had locked due to people leveling criticism at you. Merely a precaution in case you attempt to do so as this way there is proof that a thread existed and you did delete it out of an attempt to silence criticism.